Monday 31 August 2015

The Wallet Winners: Challenge 4

Room 16 is on fire!
  •  * most original *           Alan J Room 16

  • I don’t even realise that I start walking. Feeling traumatised is something that I'm not used to. The image of what I've just seen, flashing in my mind, thinking about what could happen next. I need to help but I can't. My mind floating to skyping my s=friend last night. I love talking to my friends on skype when they're away. But now all of that could be gone. After all the picture in the wallet was of nine people. All having an X on their face, all but my friend. He had a large circle on his face.


  • * most detailed description * Harri C Room 16 My hands shook as small droplets of water rolled slowly down my wrists.Rain pounded against the stone brick pathway, my thoughts spiralled thoughts only of the wallet. stitching had lined the side joining the leather perfectly, but it had been what was inside.Staining the once brown leather blood red.My thoughts spiralled faster "a tongue" "a severed tongue".Panic sent my eyes darting left and right, fear built up in my chest. A deathly moan drifted from an alley way. "Its over," I whispered.

  • * most eerie * Andy L Rm 16 I continue to trudge down the sidewalk trying to push the disturbing words out of my mind. I replayed the message over and over in my head, the stars filling the dark black void that is the night sky. Suddenly the street lights flash off. The sound of a short sharp scream echo round the empty street as the nearby sound of a gunshot encases the street as a horrifying sharp pain ripples through my body. My last thought goes to the note in the wallet that I dismissed as garbage. It read 'RUN! THEY ARE COMING!!!'



                     * use of a simile that adds to the description *                Erin M Rm 9
A man strode down the sidewalk, checking his watch and muttering to himself. 
His eyes flitted around like moths, but soon fixed on a small brown-ish square
laying on the concrete...



Staff Pick: Ms Clark ...again...
For a moment he stares into the middle distance. He bends down and returns the wallet to the street. Slowly, carefully, the man rises so as not to appear as if he has picked up the forsaken wallet, or seen what is inside. He knows it's hopeless. His arms are leaded weights as he tentatively raises them towards the sunless and threatening sky. His eyes frantically dart around the surrounding buildings, now suddenly appearing unwelcoming and strange under the cloud strewn ceiling. The man casts his eyes downwards and sees tiny chickenpox of light dancing across his heart, which is now beating furiously and painfully against his chest. The last thing he remembers as he leaves this unforgiving world is the note inside the wallet… “We apologise, but this wallet contains the last remaining traces of TZ841 on this Earth. It could only be eradicated through a final human touch. You will also need to be eradicated to protect the human race.”


Sunday 30 August 2015

Caption Comp is Back!

I te  Whakatara Tuarima -The Fifth Challenge


Due to popular demand, the Caption Challenge is back!
with 2 pictures
       and  2 guest judges
               

Winners will be:
  • The most humorous captions
  • The most original captions
  • The most effective puns, e.g.  "never lie in court"
  • Best staff as voted by you, the students!
...for each picture




ALL WINNERS WILL BE ANNOUNCED ON FRIDAY 

AND WILL

GO IN THE KETE FOR PRIZES at end of term!

Remember, to add your name, room number and photo number 
to your comment.

CAPTION THIS:
Photo 1


AND/OR CAPTION THIS:
Photo 2


Thursday 27 August 2015

Challenge 3 Winners



CONGRATS TO:


Gaston       Rm 12
Jackson     Rm 16
Arianna Rm 7
Gemma, Sophie and Nuha  Rm 10? 
And Ms Clark....I suppose.... For being the first teacher to enter!

  • Arianna
  • I kneel down. As I present to her the ring, a wide smile spreads across my face, but instantly falters. She turns her head away, sending her silky, brown hair flicking across her shoulders. She stretches her arm out in a gesture to stop, then stands still, silence fills the air. Cold, misty air curls around my shoulders, I can barely make out the creaking wooden park bench anymore. Tears flood my eyes, blinding me as I stumble away, but then a voice, as smooth and sweet as honey brings me to a halt. “Yes, I will”

  • Gemma, Sophie and Nuha
  • "Will you marry me?" I turned away so I didn't have to look at him, I tried not to giggle.
  • "No! I barely know you, I can't commit to you like that!" I stuck out my hand, and I heard some gasps and whispers from people around us.
  • "But I love you!" My brother cried out, he couldn't help it now, he collapsed from laughter.
  • "Weak acting" I said grinning, and gave him a light kick.
                       
  • Gaston
  • Shaniqua's pale skin embraces her cold lifless heart. As she stares into your eyes, her dark soul sucks out all your energy and uses it against you. Shaniqua's spiky white hair shines brighter than a full moon in a cold winter's night. Her black painted finger nails abruptly leap straight to her fringe and pull back her wig. She says...
  • "You don't know me well enough."

  • Jackson
  • Nothing but silence. Is it the ring? Is it the way I presented? What is wrong with woman? I glared into her deep blue eyes. Her golden hair swayed in the beat of the wind. My heart reached out to her. She hastily pulled me in for a hug. A thousand emotions darted through me. A ghost whispered in my ear “I’m sorry”. Bulbs of salty rain drops rolled down my cheeks. Without realizing, she had already been swallowed by the fog.
  • Ms Clark

  • So Many Questions

    "I found this in your underwear drawer. Care to explain?"
    Richard stepped backwards, shocked that his sister went through his drawers. He used the moment's silence to desperately find an excuse. 
    "Look, I knew Steve had got you this here diamond ring and he only paid $50 for it. I can't help the way I am... I owe them so much money and thought I would sell it on for a bargain!"
    "Steve was planning to propose to me? And you're in debt with someone? He only paid $50 for an engagement ring? This needs to be sorted. Now."

Wednesday 26 August 2015

Messi's Golden Boot

Messi's golden boot


It was the 90th minute Brazil vs Argentina. Argentina were on the attack Kun Aguero dribbled down the left wing and did a one two pass with Di Maria. Aguero whipped in and out swinging across straight to the boot of Lavezzi.


One of the Brazilian defenders did a horror tackle. Kicking Lavezzi’s leg repetitively, he tried  quenching his thirst for the ball. Only 30 seconds remained.  The earsplitting whistle called for a free kick awarded to Argentina. The stadium erupted into madness. The Argentina fans were overwhelmed with joy alongside the Brazilian's fury as Lavezzi is carried off the field, his body drooping in disappointment.


Under pressure, Messi places the ball just outside the box.  Stepping back, he lines himself up for the golden goal.


By Ben L

Monday 24 August 2015

'Forever Bed' By Ella H

FOREVER BED

I lay here, silent
Velvet envelops me
under hard, carved wood
Flesh is no more
My eyes have withdrawn use
Red and black is all I see
And people staring over me
I am no longer worthy of this death
for I know what I did is not right.
A bullet is no longer my protector
I am awake through night and day
I am homesick
Far away from the land I fought for



Ella H

Challenge 4

Your challenge this week is to use the scenario below to describe the next couple of minutes.

In 50-100 words, describe the man's thoughts over the next minute or two so that the reader can see every detail of it. 

BUT...only reveal what was in the wallet in the last sentence

Challenge awards will be for:

* most original *
* most humorous *
* most eerie *
* most detailed description *
* use of a simile that adds to the description *
* use of a metaphor that add to the description *
*showing the story behind why he put it back*

Make a comment below to be in to win!

Remember to add your name and room number 
so you can go in the draws.

Monday 17 August 2015

Challenge 3 - You Tell the Story.

Your chance to tell a story this week. You need to choose one of the 2 photos below and bring them to life. 

The Criteria:

* In approximatley 70 words - Write a conversation between the two characters that explains their reactions and emotions 
* The winning posts (there will be 5 winners or so) will be the ones that reveal a story behind the photo. Is there a secret? Previous proposal? Families in conflict? 


Have Fun!!

Sunday 16 August 2015

Challenge 2 Winners!

An original way to describe senses or emotions Levi Rm 12

The "I could feel that!" Award (touch) Charity Rm 7

The "I could feel that!" Award (emotion) Lucy and Ishta Rm 16

The "I could see that!" Award Gaston Rm 12

The "I could hear that!" Award Alice Rm 3

The "I could smell that!" Award May Rm 3

The "I could taste that!" Award   Ollie W Rm 16 and Charity Rm 7


Congratulations... you will be going into both kete draws at the end of term!

'6 Ways of Looking at a Pencil' By Aliya C

A long linky line with silver steps.
A tall thin ballerina on a pointed toe, twirling across a striped stage.
A wand casting spells with magic multicoloured words.
A voice, attempting to speak but without the ability to turn tumbling thoughts into talking.
A broken branch, snapped off a tree but still thriving and blossoming ideas.
A mini factory, manufacturing words, letters and sentences.

What Are Scissors?

Monday 10 August 2015

Challenge 2 - NZ vs Australia

I te  Whakatara Tuarua -The Second Challenge 

NZ vs Australia - we love it, don't we?  
What a weekend of intense sport...
All Blacks vs the Wallabies 
and 
Silver Ferns vs The Australian Diamonds




Your challenge, should you choose to accept it, is to take a close look,
a real close look,
 Image result for spy
at one moment of action from one of the above games.  
Write about it so that the action can be heard, seen, felt and yes, maybe even tasted!

Write your moment of action below as a comment and yes, as usual, all entries and winners go into prize draws!

Must be in By FRIDAY 3PM

Winners will be chosen based on the intensity of sounds, sights, feelings, smell, touches and tastes 
you describe as part of your paragraph.  
An original way to describe a sense or emotion
The "I could feel that!" Award (touch)
The "I could feel that!" Award (emotion)
The "I could see that!" Award
The "I could hear that!" Award
The "I could smell that!" Award
The "I could taste that!" Award  ???




CONGRATULATIONS>>>>

Congratulations...
... to all of you who entered comments in the last writing challenge.  

All of your names are going into te kete for a draw at the end of the term!



The Winners from I te  Whakatara Tuatahi are:


  • The first entry received Ollie Rm 6
  • The most humorous caption Louise Rm6
  • The most original captions Logan Rm 5
    Hugo & Tyler Rm 11
  • The most effective puns                        Charity, Room 7
              Maia, Rm 11
             Tom R20
                 Dominic Rm 4
              Lyle, Rm 7
Well done!
Your names will also be entered into a second prize draw!!!

Sunday 9 August 2015

OUR KOBY!

Koby
black fur
shining off the sun

long tail
waving me goodbye
Floppy ears
moving in time with his footsteps

Spiky thin whiskers swaying
with the wind

everywhere I go
he follows

leaving fur on his path.
By Levi
Picture
Eddy and Koby

Koby
Black fur covers his body,
from his baggy ears,
to his long fluffy tail.


His thick brown eyes
gaze over the dark blue ocean. He runs across the wet sand
with his muddy paws.


I smell his breath,
ewwwwww
it's disgusting,
but I still love him
he’s my Koby.

By Gaston

'Downpour' By Aliya

'Collected Writings about Otari Bush'

'The Whites of its Eyes' By Alex

"Stranded" By Harrison

"The Matador' By May

"The Mantlepiece' By Hannah

Invented Words - Aliya

Posnegitive - Positive and negative
Upsetoyed - Annoyed and upset
Fantity - Believing fantasy is real and reality is fake
Dooscribe - Doodling and writing
Alphanumeral - Replacing letters of the alphabet with numbers
Clockle - When time starts to trickle
Shongest - Simultaneously long and short
Clichiterature - A story, poem or novel written in a similar style or resembling an almost exact plot.
Worditer - Somebody who creates new weird and wonderful words
Digiscribe - Describing someone based on information from the Internet

Thursday 6 August 2015

UNBREAKABLE - By Abby Parsons Dhyrberg

Unbreakable
Knock him down again,
why not he's tough
Can't you see what's happening inside
his light has been snuffed
Am I the only one that sees,
what appears to be,
his life's now a shipwreck and his eyes are lost at sea